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11/24/2011 7:08 AM
 
Okay I am starting this thread because some people stated that they did not like the initial final chapter of The Kildaran.

This is a chance for people to give their view on what they would like to see happen and why. And what setups would be needed where for it, as well as what is the overview of Gone a Viking, giving the new ending.

As it is, I like the current ending for several reasons. First it gives the book arch a chance to return to what it was in the first to books, just Mike against the world. Second I like how it sets things up for a Gone a Viking (more on that to follow). Third there was plenty of setup for what Mike did. Fourth, it’s in line with what Mike did to disappear after both the Syrian and Caribbean incident, (whether intentional on Mike's part or not.)

Various setups:

Mike keeping the special gems hush hush; they are made into going away presents and left overs to find his escape/life style away from valley.

The dream sequence and the mention to talk it over with High Priestess, that is Mike formulating his reasoning for leaving in terms that the High Priestess, (HP,) and Fathers, (if HP shares the plan,) will understand. This is important for several reasons. HP is responsible for assassinating the Kildar when it is needed. This would need to happen to Mike sooner or later if he stayed. Mike knows that. (Full discussion of why would be in Gone a Viking).

Hooking Jack up with Stasia and bringing Jack back to Valley. That was putting an asset into position in case it was needed. (Kat refusing to elope and taking it on the lame was what put the plan into play.)

Trip to America was partially to show Kat who Mike was and partially to show her what she had to look forward to if they eloped (life outside the Valley)

All the special brew for the bachelor’s party, that is the HP, (and Fathers if she included them,) gives her (their) blessing to Mike to run away/leave The Valley. HP already knows that Kat will not go with Mike.

Pierson being in Georgia to begin with, (as opposed to sending someone else to wrap things up in PIB,) this is the main asset for the escape plan for getting things done and in place.

Main reason to leave: If he stayed and did not die in future combat action, Kat would have to kill him and that would destroy Kat. Mike would not allow that to happen and Mike is not one for suicide. (Reasons killing Mike being a chapter discussion between Kat and HP in Gone a Viking)

Gone a Viking I see as the younger generation of Kildaran coming to accept and respect Mike decision. (And possibly Kat also forgiving Mike.) The back drop of the book is the younger generation hunting for Mike. It goes into a lot of the history and culture of the Kildaran that has been hinted at in past books. I can see the last paragraph being Kat by herself walking by Mike, in the area of his new, just nodding as she passes. Not saying a thing. If she has forgiven him she will be carrying the baby as she passes.
 
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11/24/2011 12:57 PM
 
I didn't like the last chapter, but I did understand it. what I think should have been done is a little more setup, instead of it coming at us cold. The whole story was great, my only problem was with the way the ending played out
 
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12/1/2011 7:51 PM
 
Zardac, you've hit the nail on the head. I tried to drop hints that SOMETHING was coming down - something big - but I didn't want to give it away. I wanted (and want) people to read it, be surprised by the ending, and then go back and read it again to find all the clues I left behind. They're there. And once you know the ending, all of a sudden many of my little ellipses and seeming non-sequiturs make sense. I'll keep looking in on this thread. Adam
 
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12/6/2011 12:31 AM
 
I am o.0 too.... (that's watching...) :P
 
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12/6/2011 11:03 AM
 

Mmm. For me it felt really unlikely that Mike would do it on his own (apart from Jack helping) that way. From the events in the earlier books he's bonded too tightly to them to just abandon them (ala you can't bed the members of your team). And the abandonment did take me by surprise; you were a little too subtle in your setup... :)

I would feel better about it if the HP aspect was brought in more explicitly so that it's part of Mike's decisionmaking - e.g., the HP convincing Mike it's what's best for the Keldara in the long term, not Mike just escaping the burden of being a danger for people he loves (which is how it came across to me). But far be it for us to dictate your story to you.

 Looking forward to Gone a-Viking!

 
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12/8/2011 6:35 PM
 
PIB first then GAV- we hope... and we are considering all ideas. Considering, implementation of changes might be subtle too- but more facts and reasoning will be scattered in proper places in the book for sure. Might be a few lines or just a sentence here and there. Redaction or removal of others.
 
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